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Writing(15分)Does new tuition policy keep students away?! u- Q5 |: j* x6 F
目前，许多学生考上大学却为学费发愁。有人认为新的收费教育体系让一些学生在经济上无法承受。谈谈你的看法。, u0 S# W _4 Z8 B- G
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5 V+ }4 d5 f) [" r These days more students gain access to the university than ever before, but many of them worry about the high college expenses. Some people think it is the new tuition policy that makes them feel worried.But as to me, I am not in favor of this opinion for the following resons.5 d$ p+ p7 k& G# ~9 }
Although the university expenses is not a small number, many uninversities now offer various scholarships to those who get high marks in the entrance examinations.Each year they offer various prizes to the students who study well on campus. Besides, quite a few banks provide financial loans to the students who need money. All the students have to do is to fill in some forms and promise to pay back in due time after gracduation. In this way can some of the poor students pay for their tuitions.In addition, students can also do some part-time job to pay part of their college expenses or applying to the university administration for the ruduction of their tuition.
( }% Y( l& T, n. Y So all in all, those who cannot afford the university expenses needn’t worry at all, instead they should better take full advantage of the new policy and concentrate on their study.1 w8 u- Q3 E; A( \* }. K
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以下是评论:5 Z2 V0 t, k; d f
1.句子词组用得比较灵活多变，整体不错，但还有改进的空间，像expenses is not a small number太chinese-english了；the students who need money太直白，可以用更文气一些的表达方式) V/ s3 g* m W) B) }0 [& ^9 X
1 P; ~$ Y( C& U2 }0 j但是内容上蛮一般的，不会给人留下很深的影响' c8 l# r- N' o
2.好像有很多词用得很别扭，楼主应该在用词上再多雕琢一下。
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- |# [' y6 q; Peg:expenses一般是指商务或是旅行上的花费，或是说精力上的花费。单纯指学费的话我觉得fees就可以了。 X& P, Q/ G/ W
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