08年6月大学英语六级作文最后五道预测题:part1

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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of  Immoral Behavior in Public. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
0 F, l6 N+ g, T% M1 L* G1.我们经常在公共场合见到各种不道德的行为，叙述你的一次相关经历。
, \9 T9 d" _9 X, v6 p! u2.这些不文明行为会有哪些影响。
3.我们应该怎样改善这种现象。

审题概述?
这是一篇议论文，可以根据作文要求列出提纲：第一部分，列举不文明行为并叙述一次相关经历；第二部分，不文明行为的影响，一两个即可；第三部分，提出建议。

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【范文】
Immoral Behavior in Public

To witness ①immoral behavior in public, one need only visit the Beijing subway. I still remember the first time I took the Beijing subway. It was an early morning. I was in a hurry to go to school. When I was trying to get a ticket, I found a lot of people waiting in front of me, but nobody was in the line.

①Immoral behaviors in public ②initiate a series of problems. One of the most serious ones is that it may exert a negative impact on our ③sense of social responsibility. We will keep ignoring other people’s rights and feelings, and in turn, we too will be disrespected some day.
; b# n) L% t7 u0 I. L5 v  K3 AThe reform of ①this phenomenon is certainly not easy. With an eye on practical ②implementation  and ③cost effectiveness , I propose that society make it clear in every way that people who fail to respect the ④common good will be seriously punished. Stricter policies for this should be made to correct this phenomenon as soon as possible.
4 e# V; D8 v/ ]8 c9 gWe all expect “A World without Thieves". Everyone ①shares the huge responsibility of ②demonstrating his or her justice at the proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious socialist society.
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第一段思路点评
9 Z. h; U1 O  N- {; Y作文要求第一点，相关经历

语言点提示
1.immoral behavior in public：直接点题

第二段思路点评
$ o- o' Y0 [1 D3 ?; ?不文明行为的影响

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1.immoral behavior in public：重复名词词组，与第一段衔接
" W2 e/ ^6 P# s1 U6 J0 i2.initiate：意思是“产生，发动”
3.sense of social responsibility：意思是“社会责任感”

- n* w) o' d* L+ l4 i第三段思路点评
如何改善这些现象

语言点提示
1.this phenomenon：指代前文“immoral behavior in public”，
* N1 @2 ~) z* y* V+ j与上文衔接，且避免重复
5 a( K; K3 }7 O  C2.implementation：意为“执行，实施”
: c% R  ^1 H2 X5 ^2 \7 u& O3.cost effectiveness：意为“成本效率”
, X/ S) S3 \+ k4.common good：意为“公益”

第四段思路点评

% s8 j; l: ^# G* F1 j3 V' \. ~& Q总结
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% Q0 B+ ]9 \. s, }( e/ _3 m5 f语言点提示
. J/ G; L, d1 x" ]$ k4 s) T; \) Q1share a huge responsibility: 意为“承担重大责任”
( j8 E/ ]) X* }* O3 F! Q" W9 ~2.demonstrate：意为“展现”