08年6月大学英语六级作文最后五道预测题:part1

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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of  Immoral Behavior in Public. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
/ |1 W% W  H0 `, i( \1.我们经常在公共场合见到各种不道德的行为，叙述你的一次相关经历。
2.这些不文明行为会有哪些影响。
3.我们应该怎样改善这种现象。

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这是一篇议论文，可以根据作文要求列出提纲：第一部分，列举不文明行为并叙述一次相关经历；第二部分，不文明行为的影响，一两个即可；第三部分，提出建议。
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【范文】
, E) O$ ]& y! H. QImmoral Behavior in Public

To witness ①immoral behavior in public, one need only visit the Beijing subway. I still remember the first time I took the Beijing subway. It was an early morning. I was in a hurry to go to school. When I was trying to get a ticket, I found a lot of people waiting in front of me, but nobody was in the line.

①Immoral behaviors in public ②initiate a series of problems. One of the most serious ones is that it may exert a negative impact on our ③sense of social responsibility. We will keep ignoring other people’s rights and feelings, and in turn, we too will be disrespected some day.
2 T: T! B9 N' ]& b7 z, Y' dThe reform of ①this phenomenon is certainly not easy. With an eye on practical ②implementation  and ③cost effectiveness , I propose that society make it clear in every way that people who fail to respect the ④common good will be seriously punished. Stricter policies for this should be made to correct this phenomenon as soon as possible.
; A3 b2 M: ~' l, d$ _3 E6 r) dWe all expect “A World without Thieves". Everyone ①shares the huge responsibility of ②demonstrating his or her justice at the proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious socialist society.
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第一段思路点评
作文要求第一点，相关经历
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8 [7 s+ I$ q9 I/ M  T& Q1 Q  E1.immoral behavior in public：直接点题
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1 L! Y. r2 L; Z第二段思路点评
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1.immoral behavior in public：重复名词词组，与第一段衔接
! k) i! K$ z* F- |) T2.initiate：意思是“产生，发动”
3.sense of social responsibility：意思是“社会责任感”

第三段思路点评
如何改善这些现象
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1.this phenomenon：指代前文“immoral behavior in public”，
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! X9 q) M5 p3 V; K9 H0 G/ `# y2.implementation：意为“执行，实施”
3.cost effectiveness：意为“成本效率”
4.common good：意为“公益”
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1share a huge responsibility: 意为“承担重大责任”
- E1 @- p" A2 F2.demonstrate：意为“展现”