08年6月大学英语六级作文最后五道预测题:part1

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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of  Immoral Behavior in Public. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
1.我们经常在公共场合见到各种不道德的行为，叙述你的一次相关经历。
' @+ h. _* l8 l' z2.这些不文明行为会有哪些影响。
6 R3 _4 ~( C) ^8 Q- F) v3.我们应该怎样改善这种现象。
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审题概述?
  d. o6 x% d! F, m* Y" R2 ~' v( S0 _这是一篇议论文，可以根据作文要求列出提纲：第一部分，列举不文明行为并叙述一次相关经历；第二部分，不文明行为的影响，一两个即可；第三部分，提出建议。
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【范文】
Immoral Behavior in Public

To witness ①immoral behavior in public, one need only visit the Beijing subway. I still remember the first time I took the Beijing subway. It was an early morning. I was in a hurry to go to school. When I was trying to get a ticket, I found a lot of people waiting in front of me, but nobody was in the line.

①Immoral behaviors in public ②initiate a series of problems. One of the most serious ones is that it may exert a negative impact on our ③sense of social responsibility. We will keep ignoring other people’s rights and feelings, and in turn, we too will be disrespected some day.
, u! o$ |- }/ k7 Z, }The reform of ①this phenomenon is certainly not easy. With an eye on practical ②implementation  and ③cost effectiveness , I propose that society make it clear in every way that people who fail to respect the ④common good will be seriously punished. Stricter policies for this should be made to correct this phenomenon as soon as possible.
We all expect “A World without Thieves". Everyone ①shares the huge responsibility of ②demonstrating his or her justice at the proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious socialist society.

第一段思路点评
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语言点提示
$ ]  Z, A( j2 D6 C+ O% H1.immoral behavior in public：直接点题
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  y7 ~1 {' d2 S- P9 I第二段思路点评
不文明行为的影响
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. V2 I7 A" ^& l+ Q: P1.immoral behavior in public：重复名词词组，与第一段衔接
2.initiate：意思是“产生，发动”
. @, t& X+ F$ j. n/ m3.sense of social responsibility：意思是“社会责任感”

第三段思路点评
$ s  D0 D: ~- c& H9 ^+ B/ E如何改善这些现象

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+ G/ d. X/ v' f& _% l6 x* @1.this phenomenon：指代前文“immoral behavior in public”，
与上文衔接，且避免重复
2.implementation：意为“执行，实施”
3.cost effectiveness：意为“成本效率”
4.common good：意为“公益”
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第四段思路点评

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: l- G: v! F& O* e1share a huge responsibility: 意为“承担重大责任”
' f- S& n5 R3 X7 M( {, O2.demonstrate：意为“展现”